LOve it, Hank.
You're the Barney Rubble of poetry.
THis is a WINNER - competition or no competition.
thanks unknown- how do you like "hammer"?
The "caveman" speak is interesting, but I don't know if it really makes it a good poem...I can't really decide if I like this or not. Although I understand the effect you were going for, it's way too choppy and doesn't read well.
no, you don't. no, you can't. no, you don't. yes, it does.
I really just don't think that this is even a poem.
It's pretty straightforward. There's nothing really to comment on. It's just.. there.
i think its clever.. considering the "challenge" i think this is hilarious..
The first thing that I noticed was the lack of rhyme in l4 with 'heart'. The idea of this is great though. It has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
so caveman. you cheated! *sits in front of fire and grumbles* me hungry. you cook. *flicks whip* scurry!
it's short, it's sweet. i like it.
hank, this is hilarious. sometimes the genius of a poem takes a while to strike you, but i think i finally reached the same wavelength as you. props for the idea--definitely fitting for the contest. love that first comment on this one, too.
incidentally: hank win booby prize. gnormal not tell. i see naked photo gnormal. meat stick no swell.
... so hank no yank!
this is sweet ... sorry is missed this contest.
Koooweee this is koooolioooo ;)
I Love this as well simple , effective
nicely done hank...
pretty similar, yes... the idea is the same i think... mmm
so what was this booby prize anyway?
Great poem. Used it in my prehistory lesson
so many comments...so little reason.