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SpazinStoner
| As I sit here in the dark, and listen to you scream, I know that sooner or later, you will force me to my knees. Looking up at you, I am forced to take the heavy blows and every punch you willingly throw. There is not way in thell that I have a chance to survive... Not when my fate, is burning in your hell stricken eyes. | 1 |
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23 Jul 04 |
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I like this better than the other 'poem' you wrote... its still kinda corny with the rhyming thing, but I like something about it. At least now I know that you do somewat know what poetry is. I wasn't sure after reading Drugs and Alchy
— unknown
Very nice. It shows a terrible scene so well, that it's almost disturbing. My applause to this.
I found you as I was reading one of your comments. I'm very sorry - but in some ways we're in the same boat. Both my parents physically abused me - although not so much now. When I was a child most of memories were from taunts and beatings from my parents.
I'm glad you found a way to help you assuage the pain. But whereever you are, don't forget there are others like you :)
Happy writing!
— lin12342
Och, spelling mistakes :o( other than that i think its an improvement on your other poems. i've read most of them. I agree with lin12342. as far as writing goes, the best i thing i think you can do, if your not already doing so buy/rent some well know poetry ie: Keats. Learn from the masters....!
— PaulBeers
Wow this is pretty good. i can totaly relate..i know the whole feeling...im sorry you have to go through it too...keep on writing...it helps
— Emily
i really like this, despite the spelling mistakes....
there is no way in hell....
and no comma after 'not when my fate'
— omega
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