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sword of Damocles
reflects mad sun
modern thatch
of primitive hut
sine curve razorblade
wielded by wind
decapitates heads
once covered

5 Aug 04

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 — unknown

What hank? what the fuck?
 — unknown

i think its pretty straightforward
 — hank

awesome Hank.
 — unknown

 — hank

 — unknown

still no serious takers on this one?
 — hank

going, going gone...
 — hank

sexual innuendoes hank? or circumcision?
 — unknown

ah! i will admit, at the risk of sounding simple, that i didnt work out the meaning for myself (thanks mysterious unknown)...

good one hank, this ones a fucken pearler.
 — mightyjoe

...amazing what some people read into a poem...
 — hank

Honestly, I don't get it.
It may just me my intellect, however.
 — Rixes

yall reading too much into this. just a simple poem 'bout some galvanise roofing is all.
you're reading too much into it.
 — hank

 — unknown

sure hank sure and none of your other poems have any sexual innuendoes either huh?
 — unknown

Simple poem 'bout galvanising my ass...
 — wendz

i think it's sexy
 — unknown

 — unknown

thanks for the crit asshole
 — hank

 — hank

I liked it, before I read it, for it's name.

I like it now because you referenced Greek mythology in a poem about roofing.

And that is all I have to say.
 — GalvanicGirl

i like how this title reflects the content (well, as most titles do, but this one was particularly well chosen.. haha you know what i mean)
"sine curve razorblade" is a great image.. and i like the lack of punctuation here. nice.
 — gears

 — hank

 — unknown

bump bump
 — unknown

great piece.
 — listen

 — unknown