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Poetry Critical 2.0

Hey guys, Donald here.

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Random Poem:

two people, two futures, one question
CajunMoon

one question can change everything
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i can now see things as never before
 2
i see past, present, and forevermore
 3
i recognize what i may be living for
 4
one simple question...no simple answer
 5
 
 
"And do you take this woman to be your lawfully wedded wife? To have and to hold, for better or worse, through sickness and in health, until death do you part?"
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time stops
 7
i can see everything, through everything; i see everything as it was, as it will be; all secrets are revealed to me
 8
i stare at the woman before me, and object of perfection, the subject of my affection
 9
she loves me; i love her
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what we have together; the love i have for her i'll never have from another
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i said that i would marry her
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but why can't i answer one simple question?
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yes or no, right?
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i wish...
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two doors appear in front of me
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two doors which possess a future in each of them
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on with and one without
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in an effort to ease my burgeoning doubt
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i look upon my future along marriage's route
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what lies ahead is something i loathe to see
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a world of sorrow, regret, heartache and pain is bestowed upon me
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the love i have for her is very strong
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her love for me wanes over time
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times get rough, staying in love gets tough, getting divorced seems so fine
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we decide to stay together for our child, a child which isn't mine
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i go from job to job, maintaining this lifestyle she desires to see
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little do i know she has plans for her own, becoming the town slut she aspires to be
 28
she has another child, my child, and things seem to get better
 29
but because of one mistake in her most recent endeavor
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AIDS has got my child's life hanging by a loose tether
 31
i'm an unlucky father
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who's in love with his AIDS-ridden daughter
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but she dies before that incestrial test
 34
my own death by the hands of my wife's newest lover concludes the rest
 35
 
 
if this is true, what kind of marriage is this?
 36
is this a joke; is this fate's idea of marital bliss?
 37
 
 
the door closes, time moves on, i return to the side of my future wife
 38
she smiles, i grimace, beholding what may be the demise of my life
 39
i don't know what to do, i don't know how to feel
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is this future my imagination or could this be real?
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all eyes rest upon me, every breath is held
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everyone waits for those two words they know i'll expel
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"So, baby," she says. "What's it gonna be?"
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Damn, who knew a question so simple could be so complex?
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