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Random Poem:

Cheerful Death (Revised)
katt

Weight relieved with
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brief, nostalgic goodbyes
 2
barren limbs rise
 3
lifelessly greeting the chill wind
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Joy's dry tears descend, gracefully
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to their death.
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Loose red puddles,
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fade to brown,
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crunch cheerily beneath my feet.
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The white death
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can't hurt what is breathless.
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His suffocating blanket
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perches uselessly, victimless.
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But he too falls,
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at the slumbering skeleton's base,
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Fluffy puddles of white
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squelch sadly
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beneath my feet.
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Even death must sleep.
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Joy's children peek tentatively
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from otherwise barren structures,
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becoming dewdrops...
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then tears of joy, unshed,
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that whisper instead, while
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greeting the warm wind again.
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Limbs bear the weight.
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A patient mother
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gently dancing with her children,
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who, in return, shade her
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and all but my feet.
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On confiscated vehicles of sustenance
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white death returns,
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demanding respect,
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in a surprise attack.
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Desperate to survive,
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limbs and tears bow in submission,
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and tenderly touch the ground,
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hoping it is enough.
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Unsatisfied, death suffocates,
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more, More, MORE.
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The weight of death, on her children, is too much.
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No one hears the tears fall,
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only the limbs
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that lay at my feet.
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In the face of warmth,
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Death is forced to retreat from battle.
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After a warm and prosperous dance,
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the wind becomes chill, to warn
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mother and children
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"Death is coming again."
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So that their mother might live,
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the children say their goodbyes,
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from beneath my feet.
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