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Poetry Critical 2.0

Hey guys, Donald here.

In a few weeks, this site will be 9 years old. 9 years! And I still know some of the earliest submissions by heart.

But, boy. That’s like 102 in web-years. So it’s time for something new. I’m building that something now with my nights-and-weekend minutes (and plenty of coffee). Buy me a cup?

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Random Poem:

desperately offended
punchedup

excuse me
 1
is what you're really saying's
 2
that you can't handle this?
 3
or you dont wanna deal with it
 4
 
 
i knew before we started
 5
this would be a mess
 6
but don't leave me miss
 7
 
 
we both cry ourselves to sleep
 8
but we have it all in our dreams
 9
 
 
i thought we'd finally found our stride
 10
i thought we found a place
 11
with him still being your guy
 12
 
 
you kept me at arms reach
 13
and watched me fall
 14
i know we're shaken and stirred
 15
but this won't dissolve
 16
 
 
i know you're in love
 17
but love tortures us all
 18
loving someone doesn't mean
 19
giving up your life
 20
 
 
i know i scare you hun
 21
i have to live with me too
 22
i know what its like to be afraid
 23
i know what its like to drag through days
 24
i've kissed lips that tasted cold
 25
and breathed breath that spun my world
 26
i've broken hearts and crushed souls
 27
i regret that to this day
 28
but what doesn't feel right shouldn't remain
 29
 
 
so you've made it me or him
 30
you've calculated and dialed a plan in
 31
that will keep you free of guilt and sin
 32
but can you really never think of me again
 33
 
 
am i a problem you can ignore?
 34
am I the problem? (nope)
 35
there isn't a problem
 36
though you've been told there is
 37
learn to live for you
 38
before you get too old and miss
 39
whats truly beautiful about
 40
human emotions churning out
 41
unreasonable doubt
 42
lingering like a bad taste in your mouth
 43
i saw you reaching out so i kissed on your pinkies
 44
the other eight fingers stretching out longingly
 45
palms reaching for my cheeks
 46
arms reaching for my waist
 47
eyes open and bliss don't mix
 48
go with what your gut feeling is
 49
 
 
don't take this twisted miss
 50
if you wanna keep playing the hand you dealt yourself
 51
keep going all chips in
 52
i'm sure you'll get used to the lack of swing in things
 53
of dead flesh begging to flush
 54
of hairs that will never stand on end
 55
of words that don't melt your soul
 56
of looks that keep you in your clothes
 57
 
 
'just tell me
 58
are you succumbing to the cold?
 59
are you thrown in the towel
 60
are you resigned to a life spent crying in the shower
 61
whats the matter babe? soap in your eyes again?
 62
yeah everythings the same old same
 63
 
 
what makes you blossom, flower?
 64
does he sing to you cause he means it
 65
does he float on your words
 66
has he tasted what your fingers have to offer?
 67
 
 
i cant remember a thing
 68
love blurred the lines between
 69
 
 
when i felt your hair on my neck
 70
while you kissed my chest
 71
and when i said goodbye
 72
sat in my car for an hour
 73
trying to leave you right there
 74
now i'm wishing i never left
 75
 
 
what if i spilled our beans
 76
maybe he'd have let us help fix him up
 77
maybe he's looking for an out too
 78
maybe he wants to take the hat off that bitch he kissed right in front of me
 79
acting like 3 seconds lips locked is how old friends should be
 80
we were walking to meet you
 81
 
 
(if you think real hard you'll realize when this was
 82
you were ahead waiting for us
 83
oh youre cute with all that trust
 84
oh its funny thinking that just cause around you he dont know how to act
 85
that other bitches aint flopping to their knees
 86
cause trust me hun they see the same things that you see
 87
but being underdeveloped in no need of a real man to make love
 88
he can satisfy their needs)
 89
 
 
that temporary loss of balance glancing over his shoulder as we walked away
 90
said it all and he noticed me noticing
 91
so i swore my lips were sealed but still i type away
 92
and though I love being deceitful
 93
it was never my intention for shit to go down this way  
 94
justsoyouknow  (this whole verse is very much almost completely a fabrication)
 95
 
 
thats the only reason i thought we should play
 96
thats why i thought you deserved to stray
 97
i was hoping it would help you to shape the way you think
 98
to realize that your dreams dont have to stay your dreams
 99
that if he can have his fucking cake and shove it down your face
 100
that you can taste the world too rethink decisions you've made
 101
 
 
youre like a frantic fawn
 102
looking for a way through the forest
 103
followed the first young buck to show you where the heart is
 104
but you're too naive to get what you need
 105
to thank him for the ride and say its time that you leave
 106
 
 
im uncomfortable
 107
join me
 108
i hope the words i say haunt you when you sleep
 109
i hope you dont defriend me and these aren't my last words you read
 110
i hope you realize we're all wrestling with being
 111
i hope you value me and understand the meaning
 112
of strangers interactions a draw thats unimaginable
 113
not knowing you now is unfathomable
 114
 
 
i know i've said a lot but i'm not expecting a reaction
 115
don't forget what youre giving up thats all I'm asking
 116

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