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Random Poem:

Rites of Osiris
TheGrey

Rites of Osiris
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I. Isis, Queen of the Night
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Her eyes were
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glimmering lapis lazuli;
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cold, blue, milky-white,
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the chatoyancy
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of gold-flecked,
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hard iron pyrite in the
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impassive smile of fate.
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She kissed me
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at the airport and I fell
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in love. It's that simple.
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In love with her long hair,
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her kind heart, her perky, pink,
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soft breasts, her immaculate vulva,
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her strong arms, and long legs...
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the way she moaned
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when I put it
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inside
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her.
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Isis, Giver of Life,
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you formed your insides
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around me and
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took me in willingly then.
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Three years ago,
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before the demon Set
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claimed what his
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own and loosed the black
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arrow of fate, we
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were in love, she and I.
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We lived a fairy tale...
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Until...
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A death in the family undid her
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and I held on for dear life,
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but
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I can hold on no more.
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Winged Night the Butcher claimed
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two that hot evening in L.A.;
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he was no more and she came undone,
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undoing all that happiness that was us.
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II. Blood Tide
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Walking bleeding, she bore
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it and she made me bear it
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alongside her; the cruelty, the silence,
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the rage, and the irrationality.
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It wasn't long before my responses to
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perpetual incrimination
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became
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less than therapeutic.
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This scorpion
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aimed its stinger for her heart before
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turning to his own to poison.
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That burning
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can make good men go mad.
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I wasn't any different.
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III. The Crescent Moon
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I wandered far from her the last two years;
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stumbling into the arms
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of Hathor, her mother's tan breasts hanging
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heavy in my greedy hands,
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following the moon, exploding the milky way
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with a gasp, spreading both
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hemispheres apart with my hands and tasting
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the bitter, tart rose planted delicately
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above summer's sopping, sweet peach.
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The goddess parted her ivory legs and took
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my magical wand into her divine emptiness
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I drank and tasted the water that splashed
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from her insides when she screamed.
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I never knew that the last time I tasted you
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would be the last time I'd taste you.
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If I had known the emptiness that would follow
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in the seconds, minutes, days, weeks, and months
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that followed, I would have drank more deeply
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from that fountain, Cow-Eyed, Crescent Moon daughter.
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Your brown eyes haunt me, plague me like the
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rosy tips of your distended nipples; madden me
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like the soft shadow of black hair between your thighs.
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Will we ever meet again? When can I taste your mouth again?
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When can I put my fingers inside you while you look into my eyes?
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How will your hair smell when I pull it away to kiss your pale, white neck?
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IV. Shadows, Sand
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Today, I rose from both shadows and planted the seeds of new life in the Earth.
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Today, I journeyed across the sand and reached the oasis blooming within myself.
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Tonight, I long for them both again but I am content with dreams of new love.
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Soon, I will find her again, the new face of the old goddess, and create new rites.
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